Page 45 of the Cover Letter Tutorial: Example
Sharpening the Focus of Your Cover Letter:
Avoid the Kitchen Sink Approach
This paragraph is too long and contains too many ideas that are not only unconnected to the job the writer seeks as a computer programmer, but unconnected to each other. Note that he makes a stab at telling how his degree in philosophy will help him as a programmer, but he probably needs to do more to justify his qualifications based on such an unrelated degree:
- For nearly three years I have been a student computer technician for Academic Computing Services at Bucknell University. I am responsible for the repair and maintenance of all faculty, staff, and computer lab machines on campus. My duties also include the maintenance of our network and servers. Parallel with these responsibilities, I am also a lab supervisor for Academic Computing Services. I am also responsible for designing and maintaining several of Bucknell’s home pages for the World Wide Web, experience that has provided me with a detailed knowledge of the HTML programming language. In December, I will complete my bachelor’s degree in philosophy. My liberal arts background has equipped me with exemplary communication skills. I have taken several math and computer science courses in my college career. My mathematics background includes trigonometry, statistics, calculus I and II, linear algebra, logic, and discrete math. I have also taken several computer science courses. In these courses, I work with Perl, Pascal, PHP, C/C++, and several other languages. I am currently programming using C/C++ in the Windows NT and Windows 7 environments.
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