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Example of Sounding Too Desperate — and How to Fix It:
Desperate and willing to do anything:
- I would like to emphasize that I am looking for experience in the “real world” of marketing this summer. As a result I would greatly appreciate any position that you could offer.
Fixed… specific about the position sought:
- I would like to emphasize that because I am looking for experience in the “real world” of marketing this summer I would greatly like to make a contribution in an internship position in your marketing research department.
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