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Writing a resume can be hard work, and it is difficult to know what employers are looking for. This Golf Merchandise Sales resume sample can serve as a foundation for creating your own resume. This sample has been crafted with the help of experts in the resume-writing industry.
Improper Summary Format
This summary has a few different issues. First of all, it is simply too short. A well-written summary should consist of 4-6 lines, and highlight an applicants personal and professional qualities. It is also acceptable to use sentence fragments. This applicant uses the word my twice, making the summary sound repetitive. Finally, there is no need to add information about another persons accomplishments to your professional summary. Remove: My father is a successful sales manager for Trane Air Conditioning, and has inspired me to enter the world of sales
Add More Professional Highlights
An effective highlights section underscores an applicants professional and personal achievements. This section only focuses on run-of-the-mill personality traits that every applicant can lay claim too. The applicant needs to add more career-related highlights to this section. Resumes should also be reviewed for proper grammar and mechanics. Wrong:
The right version sounds slightly more professional, and fixes the grammatical errors.
Incorrect Format in Accomplishments Section
This section does not utilize the correct format. It should include at least three bullet points. The applicant also lists irrelevant information. He should include only career-related information and expound upon that. Remove: I was a captain on the varsity basketball team for 2 years, which taught me great leadership, communication and teamwork skills. Some of the skills from this section could be added to his professional highlights, but the section is otherwise useless. For the remaining information, he should rewrite it to sound more professional, and provide more in-depth information about the promotion.
This section has several flaws, starting with format. The applicant should use 5-8 bullets beneath each job description, highlighting professional duties and responsibilities. This section is also too short, and should be expanded. Wrong: Outside Service/ Shop Assistant May 2009 to Current The Golf Club at Chaparral Pines ? Payson, AZ When I started working at Chaparral Pines I worked outside service, which really emphasized on people skills. Later I was promoted to work inside of the golf shop. While in the golf shop my duties were to regulate the course, sell merchandise, set up displays and please the customers. Better: Outside Service/ Shop Assistant May 2009 to Current Golf Club at Chaparral Pines ? Payson, AZ
The right version still needs to include more information regarding specific tasks and achieved outcomes. It also eliminates unnecessary information and uses sentence fragments in order to reduce verbiage.
Include Only Relevant Work Experience
When reviewing a resume, potential employers only want to see relevant work experience. This allows them to decide whether or not you have the skills needed to perform the job successfully. Since this is a sales position in the golfing industry, the applicant does not need to include information about his retail past. Remove: Bag Boy Jan 2008 to Apr 2009 Safeway ? Payson, AZ Safeway was my first official job. Working there taught me some great people, and communication skills. Would you like to write a resume that will impress employers and get you hired? Use QuintCareer’s Resume Builder and get started today!