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A resume should be a unique expression of your personality and professional experience. By using this sample, you can create a resume that will appeal to potential employers in all industries. This commercial banking representative resume sample was written by experts whose number one goal is to help you get your next job.
Include Only Relevant Information
This summary displays many different issues. First of all, the applicant includes too little information about her banking experience, and too much about her personal life. The details about her children and daycare business are simply irrelevant. There is also a lot of verbiage that could be eliminated by using sentence fragments, instead of complete sentences. She should refrain from beginning each statement with I, and make sure that she uses proper grammar and punctuation.
Remove Unnecessary Work Experiences
The applicant once again includes excess information. The very first position in the work experience section should be eliminated. She is applying for a position in banking, not childcare, and including this job only distracts from her relevant work experience. Unless her daycare position involved banking responsibilities, it is simply not needed. Remove: In Home Daycare ? Bristol, WI Daycare Provider Provided daily in home care for three children, along with my own three children. Created a safe and structured play environment. Provided healthy snacks and meals. Maintained daily records of activities, behaviors, meals and naps.
The rest of the work experience section is fairly well-written, but it does not utilize the proper format. The information in this section should be organized using bullets, not paragraphs, and there should be 5-8 bullets for each job description. Wrong: 10/2006 – 08/2008 American Community Bank & Trust ? Woodstock, IL Commercial Loan Auditor Reviewed consumer and commercial loan collateral files to verify practice of proper due diligence. Developed training materials to standardize loan documentation and file preparation. Produced monthly exception reports and reviewed them with employees and Senior Management. 06/2001 – 10/2006 American Community Bank & Trust ? Woodstock, IL Commercial Banking Representative Prepared loan documentation, loan files, coordinated loan closings, customer service, loan payments and loan disbursements. Adhered to all federal and state compliance guidelines relative to commercial and retail lending. Analyzed applicants’ financial status, credit and property evaluation to determine feasibility of granting loans. 11/1999 – 06/2001 Amcore Bank ? Woodstock, IL Commerical Banking Representative Prepared loan documentation, loan files, coordinated loan closings, customer service, loan payments and loan disbursements. Adhered to all federal and state compliance guidelines relative to commercial and retail lending Right: 10/2006 – 08/2008 American Community Bank & Trust ? Woodstock, IL Commercial Loan Auditor
06/2001 – 10/2006 American Community Bank & Trust ? Woodstock, IL Commercial Banking Representative
11/1999 – 06/2001 Amcore Bank ? Woodstock, IL Commercial Banking Representative
The right version employs the correct format, but more information still needs to be added to each job description. Do you need professional help with your resume? Try using QuintCareer’s Resume Builder before you apply to your next job!